Hi! Just wanted to drop by to give my two cents on how you've been playing Ciel so far at Mostly Harmless. First off, I'm happy to see how you're keeping up Ciel's noble and aristocratic nature. You've got his basic characteristics down pat. Him looking down on others is actually kind of fun even though a majority of the refugees are older than him. That sense of superiority is a good way to create interesting tension and thus more interesting CR. I think playing against him with my OC shows some flaws in how I play her personality-wise and that's a good thing! It makes me re-evaluate my own character and see where I can improve with her.
However, I wanted to voice one concern since I've been reading other threads with Ciel and I find some of his reactions and replies a bit... Jarring? Don't get me wrong, you're still in-character, but I think I started to feel a bit uncertain when we left off with how my OC mentioned Queen Elizabeth the II and Ciel sort of brushed off that mention. I figured he might at least be like "Oh, hey you still have a queen in the future huh?" But I think that's just a minor thing so tl;dr.
I think after reading the threads through your last post, I just want to maybe remind you that Ciel is still a thirteen year old kid. Yes, he is a child who's gone through traumatizing situations and it's perfectly understandable how jaded, cold, and adult he sounds. But I think the reason why I brought your last post up was because I see a lot of his fellow refugees being pretty friendly towards him and I think he could probably react to them better? The thing with being young is that you're still easily influenced and he is being surrounded by various characters from all different walks of life and perspectives. While his responses are IC, they're not quite developed or show him to be a three-dimensional character (although the thread with Rapunzel was quite good at showing me otherwise, but it's not as apparent in other threads). And saying he doesn't care about other people's opinions (unless he meant he doesn't care about what other people think about him which is different altogether and was actually addressed in our thread together) is a bit odd seeing as how he made a public post asking questions and opinions WILL be stated... so either way he'll need to take what other people say into account because he is simply out of his element and environment.
Basically, you're still doing good work with Ciel. It'll be interesting to see how he tries to seize/manipulate/investigate the going-ons of the S.S. Thor to further his position as well as dealing with the other refugees. Keep up that cold aristocratic child, but don't be afraid to branch out with other sides of his personality that aren't exclusively the latter that was mentioned. Keep up the good work! ♥ If there's anything you disagree with or have question on regarding this crit, by all means feel free to point out such things a;ldfsk I'm so bad at trying to sound thoughtful TAT
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However, I wanted to voice one concern since I've been reading other threads with Ciel and I find some of his reactions and replies a bit... Jarring? Don't get me wrong, you're still in-character, but I think I started to feel a bit uncertain when we left off with how my OC mentioned Queen Elizabeth the II and Ciel sort of brushed off that mention. I figured he might at least be like "Oh, hey you still have a queen in the future huh?" But I think that's just a minor thing so tl;dr.
I think after reading the threads through your last post, I just want to maybe remind you that Ciel is still a thirteen year old kid. Yes, he is a child who's gone through traumatizing situations and it's perfectly understandable how jaded, cold, and adult he sounds. But I think the reason why I brought your last post up was because I see a lot of his fellow refugees being pretty friendly towards him and I think he could probably react to them better? The thing with being young is that you're still easily influenced and he is being surrounded by various characters from all different walks of life and perspectives. While his responses are IC, they're not quite developed or show him to be a three-dimensional character (although the thread with Rapunzel was quite good at showing me otherwise, but it's not as apparent in other threads). And saying he doesn't care about other people's opinions (unless he meant he doesn't care about what other people think about him which is different altogether and was actually addressed in our thread together) is a bit odd seeing as how he made a public post asking questions and opinions WILL be stated... so either way he'll need to take what other people say into account because he is simply out of his element and environment.
Basically, you're still doing good work with Ciel. It'll be interesting to see how he tries to seize/manipulate/investigate the going-ons of the S.S. Thor to further his position as well as dealing with the other refugees. Keep up that cold aristocratic child, but don't be afraid to branch out with other sides of his personality that aren't exclusively the latter that was mentioned. Keep up the good work! ♥ If there's anything you disagree with or have question on regarding this crit, by all means feel free to point out such things a;ldfsk I'm so bad at trying to sound thoughtful TAT